I think it's a good story, though I think you ought to have more detail in the setting, as well as what's going throught Chris' head. I figured he would have thought long and hard about switching from cop to legally a criminal. If I were him I would fear greatly for the future of my wife and kid.
It's a bit Tolkien at the minute- by which I mean there's a lot of story- stuff happens, and it's noted that stuff is happening, but we're not seeing much emotion, or thoughts of the character(s).
I know I'm prone to too much introspection with my writing, but there's probably a happy medium.
There does'nt always have to be something happening for a scene to be important or intresting. Consider.
There is some noted improvement in some areas, I suggest you go back, read what you have from the start and look for any changes that may have occured in the style of your writing or the consistency of the characters. Taking a step back from the story, analyzing it, can help you improve it later.
It's a good job so far. I quite like the latest cliff hanger, can't wait to see where that goes.
About the dialogs, I would kind of like to know who's saying what at the part where Shred asks how everyone is. It's minor anyway, other than that I like the story so far.
